Hum apneh khuab keh..

[TrueLove]

<span style="font-size:12pt;line-height:100%">don't want to delete the whole thread, because others have posted poems too.
Have changed the threads name</span>. Muskaan.

[Vicky19]

Hum apne khuab ke sholon mein khud hi jalte rahe
Tmam umr bana humsafaer ke chalte rahe

Hamare zehen her pal dhuan nikalta raha
Hum apni fikr ki basti mein yon hi jalte rahe

Mili hai daulat-o-shorat unhien ko ai dost
Qadam mila ke zamane ke sath chalte rahe

Hamari khushbo woh qaid kaise ker laita
Ki hum to lmhon ki soorat yhan badalte rahe

Zara se bhool per be mol bik hi jate mager
Zaheen logon ki mandi mein hum sanbhalte rahe

Ghamon se hum ne bhi samjhauta ker liya shahid
Phir us ke bad to sooraj ki trah dhalte rahe

[CricManiac]

mashallah thums up from me great shairi !!! ::th:: ::th::

[daxpert]

wah we did nt know we have sum gr 8 shair like allama iqbal and mohd rafi :P nice .. keep it up evbery 1

[V.I.P.]

nice poems you had posted here.. both of you.

[Vicky19]

Thx @ Muskaan, daxpert, CricManiac


jis din huaa paThaan ke murGe kaa intaqaal
daavat kii maulavii kii tab aayaa use Khayaal
murdaar murG kii hu_ii mullaah ko jab Khabar
saaraa badan sulag uThaa, Gaalib huaa jalaal
kahane lage khilaaoge mam gosht?
tum ko nahii.n zaraa bhii shariyat ka kuchh Khayaal
murdaar Gosht to shariyat me.n hai haraam
jab tak na zibaah kiijiye, hotaa nahii.n halaal
fatavaa jab apanaa maulavii saahab sunaa chuke
jhunjhalaa ke Khan ne kiyaa tab un se ye sawaal
kaisii hai aap kii ye shariyat bataaiiye
ba.nde ko kar diyaa hai Khudaa se bhii baa-kamaal
allaah jis ko maar de, ho jaaye vo haraam
bande ke haath jo mare, ho jaaye vo halaal

[qasimmemon]

thats very good man, keep it up

[DaPakiGuy]

Very Nice

[cricketbahi]

sadd.. but really cool

[TrueLove]

Thx every body..

[Farishta]

I'll give a 10 to this shairaay

[NAIFAI]

Originally posted by Vicky19
Hum apne khuab ke sholon mein khud hi jalte rahe
Tmam umr bana humsafaer ke chalte rahe

Hamare zehen her pal dhuan nikalta raha
Hum apni fikr ki basti mein yon hi jalte rahe

Mili hai daulat-o-shorat unhien ko ai dost
Qadam mila ke zamane ke sath chalte rahe

Hamari khushbo woh qaid kaise ker laita
Ki hum to lmhon ki soorat yhan badalte rahe

Zara se bhool per be mol bik hi jate mager
Zaheen logon ki mandi mein hum sanbhalte rahe

Ghamon se hum ne bhi samjhauta ker liya shahid
Phir us ke bad to sooraj ki trah dhalte rahe


Very nice effort very bombastic starting!
it needs little more attention towards meter like

Mili hay dolat-o-shuhrat usi ko dunya main
Qadam mila jo zamanay kay sath chalta rahay

and this one is like
hamaray lams ki khushboo wo qaid karlaita !
magar hum waqt ki tarhah yahaan badaltay rahay

I hope u will like it